Tinni: I am very interested in this story. I like your characterization and I interested in the storyline that you introduce here. I really want you to develop it though. I don't want to discourage you--it is very well-written and really gripped me emotionally, but I think it is way too big of a story for the little vignette that you have presented here. I really want to see you make it a bigger and much more detailed story. (Please don't come after me with a stick! I love it.) You have, however, included a least a half-dozen themes that I would interested in seeing you explore.
Can I ask one question? I do not understand the line: "...even my Curufin who was least dear to me and knew it well. Forgive me Curufin for having loved you as well as I should have. Forgive me, forgive me." I think there is a typo in this line--did you intend to write "..for NOT
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Date: 2007-05-02 02:12 am (UTC)Can I ask one question? I do not understand the line: "...even my Curufin who was least dear to me and knew it well. Forgive me Curufin for having loved you as well as I should have. Forgive me, forgive me." I think there is a typo in this line--did you intend to write "..for NOT