Drabble: True Silver

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Title: True Silver

Chapter: not applicable (single drabble)

Author: Marta (melayton@gmail.com)

Rating: G

Warnings: heterosexual relationship (Celeborn/Galadriel) but not sexual

Genre: Romance

Summary: Celeborn's first impressions of Galadriel in Doriath

Author's Introduction: Hey guys. I do not usually write fic set exclusively in the times of the Silmarillion, though that backhistory often plays a part in my stories. So setting a whole story, even a drabble, in the First Age is new territory to me. I'm mainly interested in canonical stories. Is there anything here that contradicts what Tolkien wrote? Also, I'm interested in technical things. How would you improve this piece? (Keep in mind that it's exactly 100 words for a reason.)

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True Silver
I remember our first meeting, Artanis. You rivaled even Melian's beauty! It seemed the One had captured Elbereth's fires in your radiant garland. But then I saw the jewel-studded mithril clasp, and I scowled. Cold metal should not constrain hair that longs to dance in the evening breeze.

Months later, you threw the band aside and asked for a lock of my hair with which to bind your braid. You would leave delved and forged rocks to the Naugrim, and adorn yourself with beauty worth having. That made me smile. Perhaps you are not so like your kin after all.

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Note: According to the index of the Silmarillion, the name Galadriel means "maiden crowned with a radiant garland".

Comments

[martal0712.livejournal.com]

Hi Nelyo,

Thank you for your lovely feedback.

As far as I know, there is nothing here contradicting Tolkien's

Good! I like to read and write stories that are extnesions of the book (or movies, where appropriate), so I try to make them as canon-compliant as I can.

I *must* to congratulate you for the 100-words drabble! I have written a few and it is really hard (at least to me, but I'm not english native, as you'll notice).

I commend you on your English. It's very good! Much smoother than I would be in my second language.

Drabbles are like any other art form. They're not so hard if you choose the right kind of subject. The real trick is finding a story that can reasonably be told in 100 words.

I liked it a lot, and believe me, I'm no fan of C&G, nor to flatter.

*blush* Thanks!

it made me think of the Two Trees, since Galadriel and Celeborn's hairs would be like Laurelin and Telperion shining in Doriath

Excellent way to put it. I actually thought of Galadriel's hair that way, but I couldn't have Celeborn have that thought since he never would have seen the trees (as I'm writing him as a Sinda, I mean.) So I settled for the next best thing: the stars that all those elves seem to love so much.

Thanks for all your feedback. I'm glad you like it.

Marta